The way you introduced the guy made the reader feel they were in the room where it happened. Your description of his clothing, scent, and appearance and the way you repeated it, adding a new tidbit each time really brought him to life. I'm sure all readers feel as I do, as if I met him somewhere along the way.
Quite a character. Your vivid description of the day made me shiver!
Ha! Funny the characters we remember...And yet, I forget to get milk at the store.
The way you introduced the guy made the reader feel they were in the room where it happened. Your description of his clothing, scent, and appearance and the way you repeated it, adding a new tidbit each time really brought him to life. I'm sure all readers feel as I do, as if I met him somewhere along the way.